Freshmen: Today our focus was on narrative essays. Due in class on Monday is a narrative essay of your own. We focused on the elements of thesis, narrator, problem and solution, and conflict. In addition to these elements, you need to have a good title and identify the lead and conclusion technique you're using in your header. Follow all seven of our steps for writing good essays.
Other things you need to do: the first two marking periods of Speak and a seminar prep are due for Thursday's class; due for Friday is Chapter 4 vocabulary; and tonight you need to log into turnitin.com and read through the comments on your Seven Step Essay; then write a comment on this blog post that explains what you learned about writing from the feedback on your essay. If you want, for extra credit, you can revise and annotate the improvements and hand it in on Friday. Additionally, I have extended your proof of submission of this essay to Thursday.
Sophomores: Today our focus was on Ken Rand's 10% Solution. You are to take your film compare and contrast essay, 10% it, and submit a copy of it to turnitin.com by 8 AM Friday, November 1. As a final reminder, your essay should list the lead and conclusion technique you used in your header, have a great title, cite your sources numerous times correctly, have a clear thesis that you then prove using evidence from the texts. Review the handout I gave you on the assignment to be sure you touch on all the bases.
Additionally, Chapter 4 Vocabulary is due Friday, and you should finish reading The Power of One by Monday, November 4.
CNF: Today we finished Who Killed the Electric Car? and figured out was responsible (spoiler: it was Lizzie).
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The comments made to my essay on Turnitin.com helped me build off my skills learned through the seven step essay revision process. First, statistics make all supportive ideas more concrete. They show raw facts of actions in real-life, and the use of statistics in a paper will make ideas easier to present and understand. Also, it is important that ideas included in different paragraphs aren't contradictory to each other. This happened in my paper, and it weakened the credibility of the statements. Also, the author of the quote should always be included to give proper credit. And last, but not least, websites aren't italicized.
-Will Ryan, Period 5
From the feedback on my essay on Turnitin.com I've learned many things about writing. I've learned that awkward sentence structure can disturb the flow of my entire essay. Also, it can confuse my readers's understanding of a topic. The feedback also taught me the difference between I and me when talking about a group. In my paper I talked about my mother's children, including me. Throughout my essay I wrote, "My siblings and I." The correct way to phrase that would be , "My siblings and me." I think because I'm talking about my siblings and me in total and as a group it is correct to put me. The comments on my essay also show me my growth as a writer; I'm starting to eliminate the little mistakes inexperienced writers make such as spelling mistakes. This year I've been trying to better myself as a writer and sophisticate my writing style. I felt as if the writing assignment was a great way to do so.
From the comments on my essay I learned that I have a tendency to have long confusing run on sentences. Looking at the comments I realize that I put the's and and's where I do not need them. I realized that I have to double check the spelling on words especially scientific ones. I was also reminded my titles leave something to be desired. All in all I think that this helped me introduce quotes better and to have more research. I liked learning the 10% solution because it kept me from stating and restating and restating over and over agin.
~ Katelyn Brimhall P 5
The comments that I received on turnitin.com helped me to understand how to be more specific in my writing. I now realize that I was extremely vague about my topic and how I acquired my information for it. I think that if I was a lot more specific about these things, my essay would have been 200 percent better.
From the comments left on my paper, I have learned many things. First, I have learned to read through the essay a few more times and edit more. This will help the clarity and flow of the writing. Also, I learned to make sure to have a clear thesis. Since you build your paper off your thesis, this is an very important component. If the thesis is weak, you don't really have a strong argument. The last thing I learned was to just overall make sure to tighten things up. This can be making sure you are spelling right, cutting the "fat words", and making sure things like commas are in the right place
-Mae Rodgers Period 5
The comments on my paper helped me by showing that I need to go more in depth on topics. I also need to cite my sources in the paper. I need to follow the instructions on the essay better too.
-Jonathan Stebner, Period 5
The comments I received on my paper helped me realize and fix some of my mistakes. Like I realized that I switch pronouns often and that is a bad happen. Now that I know I am making that mistake I can fix it. Also sometimes I need to cut down my sentences because I run them on to long which makes it difficult to understand.
-Skylar Lister, Period 5
I have learned much about writing from the feedback on my essay on turnitin.com. I have learned that I must do a better job in integrating my citations into my writing. The main point that I learned from the feed back however, was the fact that the templates from "They Say, I Say" need to be used in my writing more often to create a more effective essay.
- Zachary Shaffer, Period 5
The comments I received on my essay on Turnitin.com taught me that I need to be more forward with my thesis earlier in my essay instead of waiting to state it at the end. I also learned that I have a tendency to misplace or forget articles. I need to work on this in order to make my writing easier to read and understand. In the future I will be sure to use this feedback to make my writing more direct and easier to comprehend.
-Ellie H. Period 5
After logging into Turnitin.com, and viewing the comments, it made my aware of what needs to be fixed and revised in my essay, and how I need to present my essay. I believe the main problem with my essay, was that I failed to get to the main point of my essay across to the reader. I presented my information, but very vaguely.
After reading the comments, I soon discovered things things I could have improved on in my essay that I didn't fully understand how to apply. I think that largest mistake in my essay was that I dragged on too long, and I set my whole essay on a wrong thesis.
In my next essay that write, I need to focus on citing my sources better, presenting my information, and forming a stronger thesis, that will help me argue my case.
-Mason McGowan, Period 05
I found the feedback on turnitin.com very helpful. I can become a better writer by reviewing what I did wrong and work on fixing it in my next essay. I learned that even though a quote may make sense to me I need to be more clear to my audience on the meaning. I also learned that my header should be single spaced.
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